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  1. Chadrien_Maribug15 on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 07:05PM UTC

    Oh my god. Never. /never/. Say someone’s writing ending stupidly.

    1- Peppers apology was implied. This line here gives off the feeling that she had or will apologize: “ she's devastated by the news and she feels guilty for not apologizing to you first. She'll be back home in about three days or so to work everything out.” This is Pepper Freaking Potts. She knows that she done messed up. She will apologize, but she wants to do it right and in person.

    2- You say “the whole family is divided”……? How? Peppers parents are going to be shunned essentially from the Stark family. But as for the Stark family itself, it’s all in one piece. Tony and Peter have a good relationship, Morgan has a good relationship with everyone, and once Pepper returns home I’m positive that her and Peter and her and Tony will sit down and talk about what happened. Yes, for the majority of this story she was a jerk, but character redemption exists. So your saying “the whole family is divided” is honestly just untrue.

    3- “no one in the story cares about Peter but Tony and he still did the bare minimum the whole story.” That’s partially true, Tony could have done more. But he’s his father. I am not in any way blaming this on Peter, but he didn’t exactly tell Tony the true extent of what the Potts were saying and doing to him. So no, Tony did not do the “bare minimum”. And the whole “no one cares about Peter”- come on. Read the fic. Morgan: "Yeah, they were mean to Petey. I didn't like it,". A little sister will do anything to defend her big brother. If someone trashed talked my older brother when I was Morgan’s age, I would’ve flipped out and started berating the person, even if it’s my grandparent. Morgan clearly loved her grandparents, so for her to say that, she must CARE A LOT ABOUT PETER.

    So yeah. I think I debunked everything you said. The story ended perfectly. It would be great if there was an epilogue where Pepper apologizes to Peter and Tony, and there’s just lots of hugs and cuddles, but you shouldn’t demand that of an author. Think of how hurt you would be if you put tons of effort into your passion, and someone comes along and says. “Thats stupid.” Because you just did that. Just- it’s 2021 man. Get with the times.

    All in all this was an amazing fic that ended perfectly.

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      1. y0innkk on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 07:44PM UTC

        You literally just insulted the authors writing by saying how the ending was “stupid”. Leaving feedback is fine, however leaving insults of the authors writing is not okay. You probably don’t realize how much words can affect people. The word “stupid” is offensive. If you didn’t like the ending that’s fine. But that doesn’t mean it’s okay to leave offensive words regarding the authors story. I personally think the ending was great.

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          1. y0innkk on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 07:54PM UTC

            Do you not realize that when you quote on quote wrote “that ended stupidly” is seen offensive. If you read the end notes you can tell that the author has struggled to get this last chapter out, and how much effort and time they put into this last chapter.

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            1. Lexi (Guest) on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 07:57PM UTC

              No? It’s my honest opinion and like I said it has good writing and the writer has a good way I’m depicting their feelings using peter. I’m glad they’ve found an outlet in what is clearly a toxic relationship with their family but it ended stupidly and the characters are clearly divided and the stupid ones in the story lmao. That’s me saying the characters are stupid for not actually working through their feelings and clearly not seeing each other as actual family.

              Nowhere in their is that about the author

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            2. Lexi (Guest) on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 07:58PM UTC

              Nowhere in there is that about the author. In this specific story I can’t see the relationships ending in any other way. One day peter will just be a memory and they won’t even see him as family

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              1. y0innkk on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 08:03PM UTC

                Bruh 😭😭 I can’t deal with this today-

                I’m not sure if I have to spell it out for you but nothing in that response made sense

                CLEARLY the author wrote this

                You insulting the writing is INSULTING THE AUTHOR

                BECAUSE THE AUTHOR

                W R O T E. T H E. STORY.

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                1. Lexi (Guest) on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 08:06PM UTC

                  Again nowhere is that offending the author. I personally don’t know how to spell it out for u. But your writing takes u where it takes u like I said. You have no control over how it really ends you write what u feel. Good and bad emotions so yes it ended stupidly because of the divide between the Stark Family. Is the author apart of a fictional family? Cause last I checked no. The Starks are stupid and it ended stupidly because no one actual expressed their actual true feelings.

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                  1. Account Deleted on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 09:29PM UTC

                    hey, fellow writer here! you're allowed your own opinions on storytelling of course, i personally don't like avengers endgame, but i wouldn't walk up to the russo brothers and say right in their face that their work was stupid now, would i? so, let's go through this logically, shall we?

                    1. if someone says that you're offending them, then you are. and considering myself, and a couple other people in this thread are mutuals with the author, don't pull any HoW dO yOu KnOw bullshit on me.

                    2. are you apart of this fictional family? yeah, didn't think so.

                    3. you have to remember, fanfic is completely deviant from canon sources; with it we can tell other storylines that wouldn't appear on big screens

                    4. have you ever gone outside? go on, go outside. breathe some oxygen, touch some grass. lots of conflicts don't get solved in the real world, especially family ones where there are 1 or more people caught in the crossfire. ive lost family and friends to this sort of thing, it's not that simple (also, sidenote; the character the author is using, Tom Holland's Peter Parker, is noted for displaying symptoms of neurodiversity. i cant speak for the author, but as someone who is autistic, i can say its hard to express your feelings in an argument like this)

                    5. besides, it's actually good storytelling. an ending that isn't sunshine and rainbows diverts expectations, leaving the reader more intrigued. it echoes real life, as i mentioned previously, meaning some audience members can resonate and relate to these characters a lot more, and it makes you sympathise with peter, tony and other characters too. this is actually textbook good writing.

                    6. and of course, i don't have to mention that fanfiction is free. completely and utterly free to you, the reader. doing shit like this takes time and effort and has fucked with a lot of my friends heads. writing a well planned, well executed story like this takes months, hell, im writing a one shot and its taken almost half a year. please remember we have actual lives outside of this fandom and take this into consideration next time you leave a comment.

                    7. how hard is it to leave a nice comment? the author didn't ask for constructive criticism, and even if they did, you word it better, you be professional about it. cause to me, this seems like less of a reflection on the writers work, and more daddy didn't give you enough attention growing up and now you like to be an awful human to others.

                    so, as a reflection, SHUT THE FUCK UP AND GET THE FUCK OUT OF THIS COMMENT SECTION. WE DONT WANT YOU HERE.

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                    1. Lexi (Guest) on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 09:40PM UTC

                      Then maybe stop commenting back to me. You’re the one who keeps adding me back into it. And lol maybe so I mean maybe so. I come from two lesbian moms so 🤷♀️. And who said the story wasn’t good storytelling. So once again what are you arguing about?

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                      1. Account Deleted on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 09:59PM UTC

                        here, hold on, i need to break out my GCSE writing scheme, okay:

                        throughout their entire transparent argument, the writer has shown deep idiocy for all social courtesy in the writing community. Their use of the phrase "stop commenting back to me" implies that the defendant had replied more than once, which is clearly stupid and makes one question whether they should go back to set eight maths. This idea is supported by they use of a question in the rhetoric variety; "who said the story wasn't good storytelling?" when they were the one who literally called the ending "stupid".
                        As a queer person, the defendant kindly asks for the accusor to not bring up their lesbian moms who no one gives two flying fucks about (seriously, any askers?) as it has no relevance to the argument, and further enunciates that the point im trying to make is that you should fuck off, wanker.

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                        1. Lexi (Guest) on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 10:03PM UTC

                          As you once again bring me back into the thread after the writer asked not to lol. But bravo on the dedication that took 😂😂. Also you’re the one who brought up my moms not me. Maybe don’t assume someone’s family relationship that was a mistake on your part. And really a funny one considering what the actual story is about. You being queer brings no relevance to this in the same way my lesbian moms don’t so maybe take your own advice on that? Also as long as someone comments to me I’m going to comment back keep them coming 🤷♀️😂😂

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      1. krystalpomme on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 08:09PM UTC

        you’re wrong about a lot of things, so i would recommend re-reading the chapter before leaving these kinds of comments. 1) in the beginning of the story, pepper introduced peter as HER child as well. 2) this was not based on me or my life at all, and it’s a bit weird to make those assumptions in the first place. 3) the ending is a callback to the beginning of the story, it implies they’re all going on a family vacation WITHOUT peppers parents being involved. 4) they’re not divided. if i was a parent and my mother was saying horrible things to my adopted child, i wouldn’t want her near any of my kids. yeah, peppers upset that maybe morgan and pete don’t get grandparents, but i think she’s more happy that they’re away from that environment. 5) peter didn’t tell tony anything, that was one of the main points in the whole story. what was he supposed to do?

        lastly, you can say you didn’t enjoy the ending without insulting the author in the process. i was struggling with this one, i acknowledged that in the end notes, and you still chose to make the decision to comment something rude. if this is how you give constructive criticism, i would rethink your approach. not only have you offended me, but you’ve probably made others insecure to put out their own work because of this response. i would like all my readers to be respectful not only to me and my work, but to other readers as well. if you can’t be decent, then i would not like to have you as a reader on my page. there are other works you can read on this platform and i would be happy to recommend some.

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          1. krystalpomme on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 08:17PM UTC

            but you didn’t say that you didn’t like it. you said it was stupid 😵💫 and please stop assuming things about my feelings, personal life, and whatnot. you could’ve apologized and moved on, but it’s clear you’re just a rude person who doesn’t know when to stop. i would appreciate it if you would leave my page <3

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      3. Chadrien_Maribug15 on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 10:28PM UTC

        Hm. You have some points that are true, props to you for that. I don’t agree on most of those points, but everyone takes things in their own perspective.

        Also, I was never “offended”, I was taken aback at your wording, specifically when you called the ending stupid. I can semi understand where you’re coming from after you explained it more, and while I may not agree with it, you are 100% entitled to your own opinion!

        One thing though- about how Pepper’s apology wasn’t “implied”… in my perspective it was. Tony literally stated that she was going to come back and “make things right” I believe he said. It’s not his opinion, it’s fact, and that is what she is going to do. That’s how I took that line.

        And how Peter and Tony are their own family and Pepper, Morgan and Tony are their own… Morgan called Peter her brother. And what you said about how Tony did feel like that with the whole “peter and Tony going on a vacation”, my take on that was after the whole crapshow they just put themself through, especially peter, I can totally understand how Tony would want a vacation with just him and his son, giving him his full attention. It doesn’t mean he loves Morgan any less, or that he views him as a different family that Morgan, just that one of his children needs that concentrated support at the given moment.

        I honestly hated ooc Pepper in this. She totally didn’t view Peter as her own son, especially with the way she prioritized Morgan over him. Gah, it made me so angry, but that was the writers intention. I will respect your opinion, yes. But don’t think for once that I will respect the way you treat others.

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          1. krystalpomme on Chapter 6 Tue 19 Oct 2021 11:29PM UTC

            please i’m begging you to stop commenting or i will start deleting them. knowing that you just turned 13 makes everything so much worse. i don’t need a child telling me how to live my adult life or if subjects are “touchy” regarding things that are personal to me. also, speaking your mind and being rude are two completely different things. if there’s another reply i will start deleting them. the real world involves admitting when you’re wrong and apologizing. if i see you on another one of my works i will start deleting those too. please learn how to respect boundaries

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