i've been putting this off for TOO LONG and now that i'm reading it, i'm absolutely in love. teach me your ways :0
"Bruce wishes that he had more time with his father. Tim doesn't need anyone to explain that to him. Dick has also carefully not said a word about Tim having his father back. Tim bites his tongue every time someone mentions fathers and lets someone else change the subject." you're already starting this with an absolute gut-punch and i couldn't be more thrilled. it really sets the tone for the rest of the chapter.
"Tim is wearing jeans and a t-shirt. The stranger's full-face mask turns toward him and so does the muzzle of the gun." i don't usually physically respond to things when i read (aside from sympathy pains) but i did gasp at this. it's safe to say i'm already in love with this story.
"His dad is going to be furious. Bruce is going to be furious. Steph will be pissed. It will be worth it if Red Hood doesn't follow Steph home. Steph deserves time to learn how to capture the magic that Tim had never quite managed." OH MY HEART. MY LITTLE HEART IS HURTING. previously mentioned sympathy pains are happening. i am SUCH an angst goblin, but i can't help it when people like you write the most wonderfully devastating things
"Dick is already there, waiting impatiently on the front steps. Tim goes straight from Bruce's fussing to Dick lifting both of Tim's feet off the ground with the force of his hug." the visual of that warms my heart. it's almost bittersweet in a way.
[teach me your ways :0] my ways: finding the emotional aspects of a scene that resonate the most to me and then twisting everything just a bit so that it fits that character's situation more closely, then emoting all my bad middle and high school times all over the page. It's really, really great to see how many sympathize when a lot of it is based on something that his really close to home for me
[you're already starting this with an absolute gut-punch and i couldn't be more thrilled. it really sets the tone for the rest of the chapter.] The other fun part is that I took that emotional gut-punch and made plans to fix all of that because this is my story where I look DC right in the eyes and shove canon off the table like an angry cat
[i don't usually physically respond to things when i read (aside from sympathy pains) but i did gasp at this. it's safe to say i'm already in love with this story.] Thank you!! It's so good to know which parts hit hard, and something about the difference in someone prepared for a fight with weapons and armor and a full-head helmet against someone that was relaxed and has no protection hits so hard
[OH MY HEART. MY LITTLE HEART IS HURTING. previously mentioned sympathy pains are happening. i am SUCH an angst goblin, but i can't help it when people like you write the most wonderfully devastating things] "Angst goblin" is delightful, I love that. It's so much fun to emotionally devastate people and do the psychic gut punch but then to rub their shoulders and tuck a nice blanket around them and make sure they have a nice drink and everything's better. Hurt/comfort! (Sympathy pains for stories are wild, it's really cool when that happens)
Dick is such a good big brother and if this wasn't such a Jason and Tim and Stephanie story I'd have more from him. He's splitting his time with Bludhaven during this story
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melennui on Chapter 1 Tue 10 Aug 2021 04:47PM UTC
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Valkirin on Chapter 1 Tue 10 Aug 2021 10:32PM UTC
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