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  1. AndoraPenibur on Chapter 1 Sat 11 Nov 2023 10:52PM UTC

    Great story so far! I love this combo of characters, there really should be more of it.

    Little writing tip for you, that should help with all your future writings. It’s a very common mistake I noticed you doing here, and I know intuitively it feels like paragraphs need to be longer. Especially if you are used to writing like, essays and stuff, but when you are writing dialogue there are different rules. Luckily it’s really only 1 rule and it’s pretty easy to remember.
    Every time a new person is talking start a new paragraph. You should never have more than one person speaking in a single paragraph. Intuitively this feels wrong at first when writing because it can and does result in paragraphs that are literally only one sentence, but when you go back and read it you will notice it’s a lot easier to tell who’s talking. If you open up a book and really pay attention to the structure of the dialogue in them you’ll notice this rule literally everywhere too.

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    1. Nohvarrs on Chapter 1 Thu 30 Nov 2023 10:39AM UTC

      Hello, thank you for this!!

      English isn’t my first language and this has been a great learning experience with improving my spelling and grammar etc.

      I very much appreciate this tip!!
      (Most stories I’ve read in the past have all been clumped together when it comes to dialogue, so I’ve never seen how different or better structure could be in a story).

      Again, thank you so much for this! :D

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      1. AndoraPenibur on Chapter 1 Wed 06 Dec 2023 02:58AM UTC

        You’re welcome!
        Honestly I probably wouldn’t have even picked up on the paragraph rule if it hadn’t been for my English teacher in elementary school pointing it out to me one day. He was very good at explaining things in a way I could understand, so he became my favorite teacher very quickly.
        I actually remember that day very well. We were doing a writing assignment and I had been following the dialogue rule subconsciously, but it felt weird because I was used to writing essays and had never actually written dialogue before so I asked him if I was doing it right and he got all impressed. It’s a pretty subtle structural thing in writing after all, and I was pretty young at the time.
        Also I never would have guessed English wasn’t your first language, your grammar and spelling is at least as good as the average native speaker. Keep up the good work! :D

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