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  1. shrugofgod on Chapter 1 Mon 28 Jun 2021 02:46PM UTC

    the narrator is so Funny i adore it, I love how snarky they are :D

    "Ran takes his time walking to the central tower and not teleporting not because he can’t teleport, but because he enjoys the walk, and the peace.

    But also because he can’t teleport." gfdsdfghjk SEE

    this also feels like foreshadowing... ::eyes:: when will ran need to teleport in an important situation but be unable to, zayne. i am onto you. /j

    "Ran’s eyes are green.

    And as every enderman knows, that is not normal, no matter what way you try to spin it.

    But of course Ran is not messed up, or defective, or useless, or any of those other things— he’s a valued member of the Order, and he does his part to serve on missions in the Overworld." I Sense A Slight Scent Of Self Doubt

    "“Tinkerer” is the closest English word, but the meaning was actually probably closer to; “sad shut in who stays in his room and only works on projects all day.”

    This is not the least bit inaccurate, so Ran bows his head in sufficient embarrassment." pfffffffffffft i like how you write ran he's just the right amount of Competent to be a secret agent and just the right amount of Awkward to be played by ranboo

    "Ran leaves the files detailing info about Jackie Brackett in his cell." as in. jackie ]. similar to tubbo_

    <3333 love it so far! I can't wait to see where it goes :D

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    1. bovinedaemon on Chapter 1 Mon 28 Jun 2021 06:31PM UTC

      reddish-purple strilonde cow

      thank you!!!! long comments like this make me so so happy

      also im so glad you think the narration is funny :’)

      and your thoughts about foreshadowing are… hmm… ::eyes::

      and yea jackie brackett is absolutely a play on tubbo underscore pfft i like to think im funny

      thank you so much!!!! im gonna try so hard to bring more and better chapters to you guys o7 (writing is so much harder then i remember T_T /lh)

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