Comment on Unrestrained

  1. MouseTheGrey (Guest) on Chapter 39 Thu 10 Sep 2020 12:37PM UTC

    Oh gosh i hate you you know. I should be studying and instead i read this... I loved the story and the plot. I really liked the connection with crazy woman = wife, Amanda = Hope, uncle Severus etc. Very good idea!!! And the fights were amazing too. Wallace was a very complex character and I really enjoyed his story, I love Snape in the original books for complexity as well.

    Regarding language I didn't find many mistakes, there were some but not many. There was maybe too much written sex for me later on, souding kinda like porn but i can look past it.

    Story was long, well-written, made sense 99% of time.
    There really aren't many things I could dislike. Thank you for this story a I wish you good luck to the future with writing! 🙂

    Comment Actions

    1. Lizzy0305 on Chapter 39 Sun 18 Oct 2020 01:22PM UTC

      Hahaha, sorry, not sorry!
      So glad to see you had fun with the story! Wallace was a tough one to write, but I had lots of fun with him ❤️
      It's nice to hear all the grammar mistakes weren't so bothersome in the end 😊 the sex yeah, I guess I'm just used writing it now, it doesn't even occur to me that some people are not here for that 😄
      Anyway thanks so much for reading and leaving such a sweet review!

      Comment Actions