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  1. General16 on Chapter 1 Fri 26 Apr 2013 07:38PM UTC

    I think it's a great idea and it's worth reading too but. Don't take this as anything other than the well meaning criticism it is please. You keep jumping between past and present tense. While a little here and there should've been fine, I kept finding it throughout the whole chapter. Other than that, I think it's just fine as it is ^^ You write well and the flow of the chapter was good too. I look forward to read whatever else you've got planned out :)

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    1. Axilef on Chapter 1 Sat 27 Apr 2013 04:21PM UTC

      Thank you! I'm elated that you like it! :)))))))
      Yes, I see what you're saying. Sorry about that. Its one of my biggest pitfalls in writing since I was in gradeschool. :(
      I'll try to catch that the next time, but i really have a hard time correcting it.
      I'm going to look for a beta now though, so hopefully, I'd be able have much needed help in editing the next chapters.

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